When I began the piece, I was concerned that the writing would turn too bland and general because of the freedom allowed in the assignment. However, after I’ve written it, rewritten several sections and gone over it a couple of times, I realize that I took some risks. I experimented with humor and made fun of myself, which I think makes the piece more interesting, but everybody thinks they are funnier than they are. Another struggle writing this paper was unifying my more personal introduction, my more cerebral body, and my out-of-left field conclusion. The solution was to completely rewrite my final paragraph, sacrificing an important point for more cohesiveness. Thus, the piece lost some content, not engaging with “I write to make beautiful things.” However, I think the conclusion I have ties much better with my introduction as compared to the old one and more naturaly follows the body.
Maintaining the conversational tone I set in the introduction was a struggle; I could hear all my old grammar teachers screaming everytime I used the second person. Also, I pirate parts of my more cerebral body and unifyed them with some more personal details and sentiments, as in my intro. I’m not sure I fully realized the conversational tone in parts of the body; it was more injected than eveyword infused. However, I like how the paper goes somewhere else, to more intelletual territory and then returns back to something humorous or personal to keep it level. Considering all I’ve listed here, the only thing I couldn’t get quite to my satisfaction or at least reconcile myself to was the ending of my final body paragraph, where I’m not sure I managed to sow old ideas with the new as seemlessly as I would have liked. But all and all, I am happy that I managed to execute arguments that you might find in a formal paper in a more laid-back way.